THe hunt begins chapter 2

[lordike]

Chapter 2

Its a chase

Ike and snake get on a boat and start chasing after link. Ike they have a cannon. what do we do about it. PK STARSTORM. stars come raining from the sky. ness lands on snakes boat. ness uses PSI rockin and destroies links cannons.

ike and snake swim to link's boat and begin a fight on links boat. the fight goes on for 3 hours. Ike and snake are badly hurt.but they managed to put toon link in a choma. Ness goes over to the boat and uses PK teleport and savesike and snake.out of nowhere PK STARSTORM by lucas who lands on links boat

Ness yime for this to end. A great battle happens and ness and lucas fight for 3 days. at the endlucas and ness are badly hurt.
Out of nowhere a metalgear comes and snake is driving it. Snake uses a atomic laser and destroies toon links boat in oneshot.

snake jumps out and picks up ike and ness. he radios in and is picked up by a aircraft. so far there have not been any casualties to sepiroths army. ok this mission was so far a fail. we have extremely tooken out their force. link is holding that sword strong.
Ganon Is driving the helicopter. We are still chasing them.they are on the red lions. Ganon sends out the whole barrage of missles at link. ike and ness are still hurt.

snake shoots a missle down to the ocean and Link & toon link & zelda somehow got away.

Mission Fail

[¡Yiff Police!]

Ummmmmmmm.. just like the first chapter, this one is filled with horrendous errors and and don't even know if there is a concrete plot here

[Bert]

Okay, I can't understand anything that's happening at all. You're missing apostrophies where they should be, and things like "he is picked up by a aircraft" should have "an" instead of "a". The grammar is quite bad as well.