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Post by bobsnicket on Nov 20, 2007 20:06:37 GMT -5
I read yours! I read all of them!
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Post by ¡Yiff Police! on Nov 20, 2007 20:07:24 GMT -5
i know! i meant that urs is more popular than mines....
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Post by bobsnicket on Nov 20, 2007 20:10:33 GMT -5
Well I can't control the crowd but if you want help I've noticed yours has a lot of action but not very much plot; Have a plot that makes people want to read it more and takes the story in a definite direction. Also do as much as possible to make everything in your story unique and therefore easy to recall and remember!  |
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Post by ¡Yiff Police! on Nov 20, 2007 20:18:28 GMT -5
the story will get deeper..most stories take a well to booth up the plot....most of the people that have the read the story actually like the action..i guess i just have to fuse it in such a way that makes people go WOW!!
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Post by smashbro on Nov 21, 2007 16:07:34 GMT -5
ok..im gonna make the plot a little more unique yes, so right now im doing more of a prologue
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Post by bobsnicket on Nov 21, 2007 16:20:38 GMT -5
Well I was talking to Twilightlink but yes I guess it applies to yours as well.
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Post by smashbro on Nov 21, 2007 16:51:55 GMT -5
oh...ok then.
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Post by smashbro on Nov 21, 2007 21:27:11 GMT -5
ok, i updated some more.
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Post by bobsnicket on Nov 21, 2007 22:03:03 GMT -5
Good update!
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Post by Dobs on Nov 21, 2007 22:40:27 GMT -5
cool, i like, continue!
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Post by smashbro on Nov 22, 2007 7:49:55 GMT -5
thanks...poor J though. he didnt get the girl. or his name out
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Post by ¡Yiff Police! on Nov 22, 2007 12:27:28 GMT -5
Fyer is creepy..i would be scared too. good job i like this story better than the other....
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Post by smashbro on Nov 22, 2007 14:19:05 GMT -5
yeah, i dont think im gonna do any more with the olympics
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Post by ¡Yiff Police! on Nov 22, 2007 14:25:09 GMT -5
okay....i wont be sad..i like this one.,..i can see it going places!!
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Post by ready2brawl on Nov 22, 2007 17:00:37 GMT -5
I'm reading this, and it's interesting. But I don't want to say anything until it gets started... and can you add who they are (e.g., Link is JXXXXX, Ganondorf is Richard) in the character descriptions? It's confusing right now.
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