Dwayne Wadepoop321
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Post by Dwayne Wadepoop321 on Apr 4, 2008 8:43:29 GMT -5
It has been a couple of months since the Smash Universes Last meeting, and their last battle being against Tabuu. The day was Dark, and Cloudy, Mario was going to visit peach to see if she was ok. Strangely, She hasn’t been kidnapped or attacked.
Mario:“Bowser is probably planning something big, he hasn’t attacked peach in over 8 months”.
Then when he reached her castle he heard a scream, and saw Bowser with Red Armor, and Peach’s Trophy next to him, Mario ran up to stop Bowser and Bowser jumped and floated away, in a Clown Cup.
Bowser: “The masters will handle you and your friends”.
Then he started floating, away into the Dark Clouds, laughing.
Mario:“I need to rescue Peach and defeat these Masters.” Deep in thought Mario thinks “who are the masters, does that mean there are more then two people, is Tabuu one of them, Who could these two or more people be”. So many questions but no answers, still walking Mario decided to go back to the castle, for help, and to explain to Luigi what happened, after awhile he decided to run to tell him the news quick.
What cha' think about it, i think its good, and its my very first Fanfic in life or atleast on this forum. Also it will be a little like Smashbro's fan fic with the groups and grabbing Smashballs, etc.
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Post by Ghost on Apr 4, 2008 8:51:02 GMT -5
you already know my views ;D
CONTINUE ON WANDERING TRAVELER
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Post by Dwayne Wadepoop321 on Apr 4, 2008 9:01:19 GMT -5
Ok, I'll post Chapter 1 Now
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Post by bobsnicket on Apr 4, 2008 16:39:27 GMT -5
It's written well and interesting enough, but do try to make it much different from all the other stories; it's hard to keep track of all the plots at once when several of them are extremely similar...
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Post by Dwayne Wadepoop321 on Apr 4, 2008 20:44:07 GMT -5
Ok, it is a little diffrent but based on the same thing
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Post by ¡Yiff Police! on Apr 5, 2008 17:14:34 GMT -5
Yea Bob has a point but its GOOD!!
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Post by Dwayne Wadepoop321 on Apr 5, 2008 17:15:41 GMT -5
I think its a very good Prologue
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Post by MortalSuperNinja on Apr 5, 2008 17:20:56 GMT -5
Yeah the prologue is pretty good.
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Post by Dwayne Wadepoop321 on Apr 5, 2008 17:23:41 GMT -5
and the chapters are up also(3)
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